I really liked this one, it even got me a bit teary-eyed
I'm not even entirely sure why. Maybe it was the theme, but it was really nice
A short story about elderly people playing bingo turns into an exploration of what it means to win
SPOILERS
I like the characters, the grumpy Bear full of regrets, and the mischievous Bird, also full of regrets but in a different way
Their characterization makes sense and it is fun to see them interact
Add to that the constant theme of Forget-me-not flowers being one of the only colored pieces in the art, the other being wedding rings. I loved that symbolism so much!
As others have said, the only issue I have is the textbox being such a solid color it blocks the view from important details in the art
sweet little vn. i love how much of a hater dominik is. old man's just FED UP with people's shit
as for feedback, the final illustration had dominik hidden behind the text box. you could've moved the entire picture up to show both martin and dominik and get rid of that wasted space above martin's head. but other than that everything's sweet
edit cause i thought up some additional feedback, this time for the writing: the pacing was excellent for most of the story but the final musings between dominik and martin felt really abrupt. they could've used some more screen time
Alright! Aknowledged. Next time I try to look at the positions of the art to not contradict with the ui.Should have taken a little more oven time with the ending in retrospective.
Thanks for the feedback and glad that you liked my fvn :D.
It was fun but a bit weird. The rivalry between Dominik and Martin was shown really well. Martin's rings were hidden by the text box, that wasn't great.^^
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I really liked this one, it even got me a bit teary-eyed
I'm not even entirely sure why. Maybe it was the theme, but it was really nice
A short story about elderly people playing bingo turns into an exploration of what it means to win
SPOILERS
I like the characters, the grumpy Bear full of regrets, and the mischievous Bird, also full of regrets but in a different way
Their characterization makes sense and it is fun to see them interact
Add to that the constant theme of Forget-me-not flowers being one of the only colored pieces in the art, the other being wedding rings. I loved that symbolism so much!
As others have said, the only issue I have is the textbox being such a solid color it blocks the view from important details in the art
Overall, a great read!
Love it, the dynamics between these two entertained me more than i want to admit.
Ate the whole fvn too fast tho, ill be more mindful next time.
sweet little vn. i love how much of a hater dominik is. old man's just FED UP with people's shit
as for feedback, the final illustration had dominik hidden behind the text box. you could've moved the entire picture up to show both martin and dominik and get rid of that wasted space above martin's head. but other than that everything's sweet
edit cause i thought up some additional feedback, this time for the writing: the pacing was excellent for most of the story but the final musings between dominik and martin felt really abrupt. they could've used some more screen time
Alright! Aknowledged. Next time I try to look at the positions of the art to not contradict with the ui.Should have taken a little more oven time with the ending in retrospective.
Thanks for the feedback and glad that you liked my fvn :D.
It was fun but a bit weird. The rivalry between Dominik and Martin was shown really well. Martin's rings were hidden by the text box, that wasn't great.^^
Probably should have drawn the rings a bit higher. My fault and thanks for the feedback! Glad that you enjoyed my fvn!
I like it, the ambiance is peaceful.